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In The Daylight

A false downfall
An unexpected revival

Sunset to moonset
Shining through darkness

Life...redefined
Death...redesigned

In the valley of promises- I will fear no end
On the brink of weakness- I will ascend
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Roads of the toughest
Paths of the darkest

I conditioned my flawed limits
So fearful memories won't be paralytic

I had to raise my own spirit
Strength and endurance become so vivid

A chance for change / A moment of fate
A time to make peace / A brief feeling of creed
A sealing of my slate / A silencing of my mistakes
A secret ready to be freed / A chain soon-to-be incomplete

Pain and peace are infinite
Judge the wrath of the wicked

Victims can be vengeful or forgiving
Prolific tears are forever listening

To the cryptic lyrics that layout life's experiences
A few simplistic words can become so endearing
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And I start again
Making the possible amends

Sunrise to moonrise
I continue to survive

Recovered...damage
Empowered...courage

Through my unbroken eyes- I am still alive
Inside my revitalized light- my soul has been immortalized
It wasn't my time
As I got a second chance at life
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This poem is written for my project, titled "The Other Side Of The Sky"
In volume one: Memories Of One

In The Daylight -
In The Moonlight - Not Yet Written
In The Snowfall
In The Snowfall

I remember it
As if it was just last night
Our surroundings were lit
Illuminated by the surfaces covered in white

The way you smiled
It gave me comfort inside
And my heart seemed to be veiled
Knowing you have become a part of my life
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Step   by   step
I stopped blinking
As   we   tread
I ceased breathing
Chills   were   sent
Our hands touching
Our   lips   met

Gazing at you is a must
You curiously peered up
As snowflakes danced down towards us
And it dawned on me that I was madly in love

Mesmerizing   my   soul
Spreading a calming warmth
Into   my   core
I held you in my arms
I   felt   whole
Connected our hearts
Alone  

In The Rainfall
In The Rainfall

Pent-up
Overly repressed
Dripping with blame

Thoughts erupt
Pain expressed
Drowning from hate

I felt...
I felt...
I felt your anger

I held...
I held...
I held my pieces together
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I always wait for the right moment
To finally break down

I need the pain to flow perfect
To let it all out

I'm reaching for my tainted core / I won't let you corrupt me anymore
You will not be a part of me / This is not how it's going to be

I always wait for the oncoming storm
That's the only time

Endure it all until the promised calm
Just to call it mine
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Set free
Sorrows shattered
I am myself again

Grief released
Clouds scatter
It's gone

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ValaSedai Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's so awesome!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!
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Shadow-Of-Fear16 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This piece is very powerful. The word choices are fantastic and the pattern of it all works out wonderfully. I as well as many others it seems enjoy how you poetically described the journey whomever was going through wonderfully as well as reminding everyone you shouldn't give up. If you work through it all everything will work out in the end. It's uplifting and also inspiring if I dare to repeat myself.
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Repeat it and repeat it again! :D
I can't stress it enough that everyone and anyone should never, ever give up. I really do hope that message gets through to as many people as possible. <3
Thank you. It was a blast going through your team's messages/feedback.
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DangoLovesYou Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Student Writer
Another intriguing piece.

The pattern, the repetition, you included did great things for the poem. It gave the piece a good, steady drive, so it didn't lag at any given point. I'd also say it did well for the ideas, keeping them fairly well connected, in addition to thoroughly expressed.

My only doubt about the piece would have to be the focus. Perhaps it was on purpose, but it seemed to go off on a bit of a tangent around the middle. The ideas strayed from the narrator, just a little. This, of course, could just be my misinterpretation, but I thought it worth mentioning.

3.5/5
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There's a huge, huge story behind this poem, so it would be difficult for anyone to fully connect each stanza. Sometimes I get too metaphorical with my rhymes and words, that it does get misinterpreted, and I apologize for that. What I secretly depend on during my releases- is that I hope whoever reads a certain piece of my work actually can relate to it in some way or another. It's like if you ever been through something in life that changed you in a big way- than you would maybe understand this a little bit more. I don't know if you did or didn't, but that's my secret strong-suit in writing.

"Roads of the toughest
Paths of the darkest"

If you ever made it through something that maybe many others find impossible- than you know you could do it again if it ever came down to it. No many how many times we fall during our paths, it strengthens us internally and externally.

"I conditioned my flawed limits
So fearful memories won't be paralytic"

Memories can be eternal, and unfortunately memories can be dark and full of agony. Down the road, those memories can be watered down to the point where it does not effect you like it used to in the beginning.

"I had to raise my own spirit
Strength and endurance become so vivid"

I believe we are our own saviors, at an extreme point of view. Sure, we depend on each other, but that has its limits, too. You can only depend on a friend or a family member for so long, but they are not always with you every second of your life. The only one who can truly save you is yourself.

The words behind the words all connect to strength, recovery, and hope.
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odinify Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
The format is excellent in that it conveys a journey through the struggle, I like it!
When I was suffering with Guillien Barre's Syndrome (caused from a bad reaction to the flu vaccine in 1992 ) I had many of the thoughts and feelings written here. It was truly a new beginning....
"A false downfall
An unexpected revival"
I was 80% paralyzed from the waist down for a total of 3 months and for 2 months after I had to deal with facial palsy on half my face. During the entire ordeal there was a transformation or revitalization of sorts....
"On the brink of weakness- I will ascend"
I realized how much I took for granted and life was starting over....into the daylight.
Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece! Fav'd
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The parts of the story you shared seem unrelenting. It's hard to imagine, for me, at least. In The Daylight does represent that feeling though. I wanted it to express the feeling of "getting through" an event in life.

"Sunset to moonset
Shining through darkness"

Sometimes, some of us go through days that seem pitch black, and hopeless. But we still endure and live through them, not because we have to, but because we want to. Even in the darkest times of our lives, we still breathe.

"Life...redefined
Death...redesigned"

When you get through a turning point in life, it can change everything. It's just how you look at it, and how you accept it. An event can redefine the way you think, feel, live day after day. It can put you in a state of fear, and after that state is passed- you gain more courage for surviving it.

I'm glad you shared a little bit of your story with me, it's always an honor to hear a person's story. It can be difficult talking about certain things with people over the internet.
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geminicomet Featured By Owner May 28, 2013  Student Writer
*gasping* *clutching my heart* *speechless*

Love it!!!!! Breath taking!!!
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
I love your enthusiasm. Thank you!
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