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Rain Of Color

All of the struggles I had to endure
I always desperately held on
It was a day after day ritual
Learning to stay strong

Different advice from the wise
I had to fuse it all together
And make sense of every voice
I couldn't allow my hope to wither

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Believe in the soul
Embrace the heart
It's what makes you whole
It defines who you really are

Envision the dreams
As if they're real
Remember where you've been
Know that every wound will heal

Every scar tells a story / Every step is towards glory
There's always a chance to triumph / There's always a time for resonance

We always pick ourselves back up / There's no such thing as enough
Born to live free / Alive to feel peace


Hold onto that spark
Even if it's not much
It'll guide you through the dark
It'll help you when you're lost

Compare not to others
Live at your own pace
It always gets better
Faith never really fades

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I've made it to this place
Where finally I realize
I've journeyed through the pain
And I have survived

Even though I walk through the valley of color
I will not fear life
And never again will I have to suffer
For thou art my light
Let it fall / Let it storm
Rise above all / Hide no more
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This is a reflection of my dark poetry series "The Rain Chronicles"
Featuring
Rain Of Fate
Rain Of Fate

The proud flags were torn away
When warfare came

Burning buildings collapsed
Just like the nations which used to stand

We're no longer united
Because we're consumed by fighting

Quarreling over desires / selfishness is earned
Money sets lives on fire / morals are governed
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Humanity conquered this gift of nature
Because we were given this curse of failure
Just our simple touch turns beauty into torture
And we won't stop, until we get more and more

The sins of our fathers
The prayers of our mothers
The tears of our sisters
The blood of our brothers

A man-made cycle of life and death
Believing in religion; and ab
and
Rain Of Darkness
Rain Of Darkness

Something inside me broke
The core of my soul snapped
That is when I felt this numbing cold
I blinked, and everything started to fade to black

When you left me alone
I felt this eternal betrayal
When you finally let me go
The pain inside me became unstable

The weight on my shoulders collapsed
While the world I knew faded
As the remorse relapsed
I'm consumed by hatred
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Thou have forsaken
So the rest shall witness my conviction

My hope was taken
But was replaced by affliction

You knew what would happen
When you took back your salvation

Why am I the one abandoned?
I didn't take -ANYTHING!- for granted

Rev
and more.

I call this version "The Rain Fables" which focuses on the lighter side of life. Stay tuned for the rest of the rain poems!
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The cover art is made by me, I used my own photo-

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This poem is written for my project, titled-
"The Other Side Of The Sky"
In volume ten: The Rain Fables
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Old Friend: PrologueOld Friend

Prologue: The Day The Rains Came For Me

I had a feeling that it was going to rain soon. Oh how I wish to get caught up in it. I don't have an umbrella, and my coat doesn't have a hood. The desire to become drenched lingered, because I haven't gotten drenched in such a long time. I love the sound it makes when it hits every surface. The clings and clangs were a joy of mine. I secretly love it when my hair gets wet- or ruined. Especially when my bangs droop down into my eyes. I indulge in the sensation of when the water streams down my cheek.

It was cloudy and the hue was gray. I couldn't stand the humidity that plagued the city.
Let The Wounds Be Undone
Let The Wounds Be Undone

I heal to just be healed again...

So many wounds to mend...

My body feels no end...
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Without pain there can be no relief
Last resort hope gives birth to belief

I knew there was always something better
I prayed for the days ahead to get brighter

As I lay in ruin
I feel my heart still beating

Pieces of destruction
Can be transformed into pieces of creation

Forgot about yesterday / I only know of today
The light sparks my way / Pushed the darkness away

Life is what I'm fighting for / You can't hurt me anymore
I'm stronger than before / The broken pieces are now whole

I wave my tarnished hands
Over my t
Sobriety's Rise
Sobriety's Rise

I exile you from my veins

You won't affect me ever again

Take with you the very worst of me

I will no longer be a part of thee!
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Too long have my eyes been closed
So many years have passed in vain
I can't let the road ahead get any worse

I'm no longer a victim of your taint
I dwell no more- in those old woes
Though I regret the pain I allowed myself to sustain

Mirrors don't snare / Family doesn't glare
This hope I bear / I've made it here

Cleanse my spirit away / Allow scars to fade
Embrace the change / Unlock the cage

My dreams will no longer weep
The nightmares refuse to reimmerse
I can move forward if I r

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I like the placement of your words and none were overly repeated, but if I would change anything about this piece I would say that the imagery of the piece needs to be greater, because for a "Rain of Color" it wasn't really colorful. One of the great things about poetry is that you should be able to feel each word's strong emotions and it should never be a secret about what it is centered around. I give you props for having most of it rhyme, for me that has always been a hard thing to produce. But, just a little hint, I would try to work on the lines of the poetry, (this is free verse, so it's not really that big of a deal) because the beat of the piece (for lack of a better word) seems to be off in certain parts and it doesn't follow correctly.
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tanya3286 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Professional Writer
Quite moving and beautifully phrased. :heart:

I love your line 'Faith never really fades'. That's wonderful and true.
Keep writing. :rose:
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now that you point it out, that line is pretty powerful.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this one. It makes me nervous that some people thought it wasn't as effective. I wanna make it better, but I don't know if I can.
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tanya3286 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013  Professional Writer
Nah... never ever stress if its 'effective enough' for other people. Its just their view that they are giving you. You wrote it first and foremost for yourself, eh? What moves the soul and flows out of it as creative can never be non-effective... how can it be, when it created something?! :)

It was beautiful. I felt that the writing style was childlike and simple... not in a clumsy way, but in an innocent way. Its the declaration to be strong, that you are making to the world, after being hurt but knowing that you came out wiser and worthier. Its honest, that's what makes it special, even in its simplicity.
Simplicity may not always be appreciated in a world that loves complex things, emotions and people, but it is one of the most powerful and desirable attributes of the human soul. Its divine in its origin and so its ever-beautiful. So don't you ever worry yourself about that. :hug:
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the reassurance. I need something along those lines said to me once in a while. I get too caught up in certain things with certain people to really focus on the end goal. <3
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tanya3286 Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Professional Writer
You are always welcome! :aww: Type out feel good and reassuring lines or mottos like that from your printer and paste them anywhere where you see them regularly - bathroom door, walls, desks... etc.

It reminds you as to what is really important and drives the waste thoughts from your mind and keeps you free of garbage. :nod: :heart:
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Professional General Artist
That is wonderful, I first clicked on this because the name reminded me of my very old drawing :thumb312286130: and I think it works very well together :)
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:D
Yeah they both remind me of each other now that you pointed it out.
How old is that drawing? It's awesome! ^_^
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Fan-Gogh Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Professional General Artist
A couple of years maybe?
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MasukiaMaru Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations ! Your deviation has been featured in the group :iconfeature-me-weekly: :heart: :hooray:
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RecoloringLife Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's so awesome! :D

<3
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